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The first text suggeststhat youngsters usually purchase items with either little or no forethought at alland (that they) are easily influenced by both their peers and also icons from various fields of show business. It is suggestedthat this attitude is contagious and may also dominate the shopping habits of parents - luring them into buying articles without thinking twice. Indeed, many times have I convinced my parents to buy – as later turned out – unnecessary items. (Check word order in the last sentence)
Furthermore, the first text goes on to mention the inclination of youngsters to follow trends and copy each other. In spite of this being true, copying one another’s style cannot onlybe thought of as a quirk of youngsters since it is also common among other age groups too. Consequently, the inner urge to measure up to the expectations of society is a human trait and under no circumstance shouldcopying others be perceived as (a) deviation from social conventions.
As the second text insightfully indicates,youngsters may not be (?) that pliable, because they may have grown up in the unending bombardment of ads which they might have accustomed themselves to and by doing so, they have become resistant to the temptation of Advertisements. Notwithstanding the deceptive nature of some ads, advertisements, varying greatly both in nature and function, can also be informative– as implied by the writer of the second text. This being said, adverts can also help people make easier and better choices. (Check use of modal verbs)
Today, with the explosion of channels and websites, advertisements hold sway over us making it almost impossible for us to escape. I would also mention that subliminal advertising, to which we are exposed on a daily basis, is even more harmful. Our minds take up more information than we think they do – doing this without us knowing. However, we are still responsible for our choices and should act after exploring more options in order that the best one can be found.
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Good use of grammar and high level use of vocabulary, just be careful not to make the text "too difficult to read" for wanting to use elaborated words.
I think you are missing a conclusion. Another thing is that you have to check the number of words. I have not counted them but it seems a little too long?